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dysfunctional

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father is
a startled sparrow,
paranoid personality disorder
depression, bipolar
             [father lives on lists,
              father strives for consistency
              with what has been written
              by doctors-nurses-politicians
              serpentine and setting standards too high to reach]
a neurochemical molotov cocktail
always dreading
the day he'll explode.

father regrets
every single mistake he makes,
father wants to make sure
daughter is
perfect
so she won't end up like him.

father lectures poetic
on sadness and suicide
rebellion and self-pity
as if they are the scum of the earth
as if he is the scum of the earth.
             [and self-esteem was not a gift
              he could pass down to daughter]

mother is a maple tree
standing tall and strong
             [but forgiving]
mother swallows her pride
and knows that she is not perfect
and neither is daughter,
that good judgment comes from experience
and experience comes from error
             [but even the best of parents keep secrets,
              silky snakes wrapped around the best of times]

daughter is a rabbit,
just an ordinary rabbit
scared out of her wits
by the future
she is not perfect enough to endure
             [silky snakes devour rabbit-flesh
              indignant misled sparrows scavenge on what is left,
              bereft]
edit: I added some more. mostly the bracketed lines. and broke up the stanzas more. tried to make more of a story. even threw in a nature theme.

anything you want to comment on? particularly, the formatting ( I think some of the lines might be too long, but then the stanzas were too long) or the storyline?
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kally8329's avatar
god I just really love this.